http://matsieftw.disqus.com/enSat, 24 May 2008 15:51:24 -0000http://www.matsie.net/2008/05/this-city-is-killing-us-wip/#comment-1879020a rewrite, just for kicks, by me. :<br><br>This city is killing us. I’m certain. Brush the hair out of your eyes in the park. Gaze squarely set on the skyscrapers surrounding us; enveloping us; consuming us. I chuckle and drink sweet tea.<br><br>My laptop on the corner of our blanket, playing song after song. Silently we listen to the swells and crashes. I gently hum along for a bar or two. I lay my head in your lap. You watch the taxis drive by, honking and transporting. Pick a blade of grass and tickle your hand. You laugh and lean down to kiss me.<br><br>“We should run away. Pack the car with the odds and ends of our life and run away. We could go from town to town and pick up random jobs and make money for the next gas tank. We should run away.”<br><br>I’d never heard you so excited without the aid of alcohol; without the aid of cocaine; without my aid. You seem more alive in this moment than I had ever seen you. You look into my eyes and I can feel you waiting for my response. I feel your eagerness to do something, but more importantly, that I be involved in what you wanted to do.Steve BarmanSat, 24 May 2008 15:51:24 -0000